Poem - God
- paper2crane
- Nov 8, 2015
- 2 min read
“I’m happy,” he said
His dazzling smile appears
Who is he going to remember?
His family that he loves so much
Without realizing he leaves out the important One
“There were some obstacles, but I got through it,” he said
His eyebrows form a frown
Who is he going to remember?
The friends and relatives who used to help him
Without realizing he leaves out the important One
“I give up,” he said
Tears brimming at the corner of his eyes
Who is he going to remember?
The sharp knife and the strong rope
Without realizing he leaves out the important One
The important One, on the other side
When he’s happy, He’s happy with him
When he’s trying, He encourages him,
And says, “something great is in store for you!”
When he gives up, He reminds him
“You still have me, remember?”
Humans
The definition of imperfection
The creatures who pay no heed
Begging for happiness all the time, forgetting whom they begged to
Thus we shall remember
Someone is watching us always
Ready to give happiness after you’ve finished the obstacles
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This was the first poem I've ever showed to my English teacher and my dad. I was inspired by so many people who decided to end their lives by doing suicides even though some of them could've done something and switched their lanes from the dark ones to the bright ones.
The story in this poem is about a man who got through some obstacles in his life until it felt like it was his limit, but then, he kept forgetting about the God who has been giving him lots of things in his life, until he decided to kill himself.
I personally don't think this is a really good one, even though I think it's pretty good for a first-time.
What I did to this poem was that I used the same 'forms' in order to write the first three stanzas.
e.g.:
“I’m happy,” he said
His dazzling smile appears
Who is he going to remember?
His family that he loves so much
Without realizing he leaves out the important One
“There were some obstacles, but I got through it,” he said
His eyebrows form a frown
Who is he going to remember?
The friends and relatives who used to help him
Without realizing he leaves out the important One
As it's shown above, the first line would be 'his' feelings or conditions in life. The second line would be 'his' facial expressions, and then the question of "who is he going to remember?" The next line would be the answer to the question, and the first three stanzas were ended with the same sentence or line, which was 'Without realizing he leaves out the important One'.
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